Official Promo Discussion Back in Business VI Thread

[Eyesnsane]

I like women's nipples, and have complimented a couple of women on there nipples....

[iMatt]

Johnny Octane: A sad promo, made me feel for Octane for a bit and understand a little bit about his past, but you also had him acting enough like a cocky jerk to stay heel though it did walk the tight rope a few times. One other think you had the "f" word at the end of this promo I censored it. The "f" word is not allowed to be used in promos.

James "Eyesnsane" Hughes: Johnny Drama and everyone has it right and this is something I've said for a while too. You have become too good for the Young Lions title. A promo like this could give the current TV/NA champs a run for their money. Loved the splicing of past matches with the promo really well done and you went after Juan well. Good work.

Duke Drazin: You have always produced great promos and this is no different very poetic promo fitting for BIB and I have to say this promo could win you the world title. Its not mind blowing but its very strong I love the whole reality/dream concept and Drazin just has a way with words that is chilling.

Tommy Tripper: I really like this gimmick and can't wait to see more with it. William Stevenson no showed hopefully you end up being a reliable wrestler I can see you becoming a star one day.

Xavier Xander Xerxes: One of your best promos in a while, I think you are starting to grow as a wrestler and roleplayer but I think XXX's gimmick still needs to stand out a bit more. I think you should work on getting into a storyline feud with someone with segments where I can see XXX interact and grow as a character who stands out. That being said this promo was a good heel promo and Rondo will need to do some hard work to match/beat this.

Ryan Rondo: a short and simple promo but I could for sure hear Ryan's voice in this promo this was a distinct Rondo promo and I appreciate that. This was a solid promo.

Darnell Porter: These are the kind of Darnell heel promos I want to see! This was a great promo, I think its safe to say you've got your mojo back baby! Talking about frustrations and anger with being in a dark match and everything really added spice to this promo which you could have dialed in but you didn't I like that.

Anthony (Elimination Chamber): Nothing short but epic in terms of your promo here. Really went after each opponent well and good work drawing comparison of last year's chamber to this one. Shows you did some research for this/have good memory and application. This promo is showing me hints of a possible one day world champion Anthony.

Anthony (TV title match): This is the feud promo for the title and you can feel the intensity in this one. It lost steam a few spots here and there maybe that was just placement of promos though since I had just read a ton of Anthony this was a lot of Anthony back to back lol.

Mark Reynolds: Glad to have you back, hope you make an impact this time around. Solid return promo.

PAJ: Possibly best PAJ rp Ive read since you're return. Love the fact that PAJ stole the physical title belt and it just really works for the character and you milked it for all it was worth with your promo. What a great promo, little to criticize on this so I won't because I found this to be focused and strong.

Chris Kennedy: What a fun and engaging promo. You really tore into your opponents and liked the format and flow of the dialogue. Really nice work, you really went into detail with the characters and even Kennedy himself this Elimination Chamber is gonna be SICK!

Aut Pax Aut Bellum: This promo made me laugh in spots. It bad such a manic energy really enjoyed reading it, was not a short promo but a quick read and that's always a good sign just a lot of fun with this promo really enjoyed reading it. People can say what they want about lack of title defenses but APAB is a legit tag team.

Charon: I can see what you mean saying this promo was more about building up Charon and his mystique and current storylines that being said this is still a very good promo that people could take notes on. You really gave an atmosphere with this promo and the dialogue really stood out as unique to Charon.

Eyesnsane (Elimination Chamber): Tough guy promo eh? lol this was a good one. OTE has been so strong and Eyesnsane belongs in this match you've improved so much in a short amount of time! I wasn't crazy about this promo at first but you really won me over as it went on.

Alexx (Elimination Chamber): This was a hilarious promo! But had a lot of good lines about your opponents in there as well. It really is an entertaining set and I think that the chamber will be an entertaining match as well because honestly looking at all these promos I can't tell whose gonna win.

Dinorah Redgrave: I understand the jokes about the over the top sexuality of this promo. I mean this takes pseudo bisexuality to a whole new level lol but still the perv in me enjoyed it. Was it a fantastic promo? No, but it did keep me entertained.

Devin Golden: This promo really took me back to the journey and drive Devin has and why he's been able to accomplish to much in a short amount of time. Of course it was hard for me to fully connect with him since its in a heel style but I quite enjoyed this promo and maybe Devin will have one more accomplishment to add to his resume real soon.

Alexx (NA title match): You really went after me and Carmine. Hope my promo is good enough to beat yours

Carmine Reaper: Good imagery in this promo, and of course I still want to beat you.

Wolf: I can tell based on this promo that you are hungry and ready to be a world champion and you may have just done it with this promo. What a great promo loved the energy and intensity of it. You have really evolved and improved since returning to one of the biggest threats in the entire FWA.

Gabrielle: what a sexy promo but what a mind trip as well good and effective use of the narrator which 9 out of 10 times is cheesy in a promo you made it a slam dunk! Wow! Just fantastic work, this is a promo that seperates the main event to from the upper division and the mid card. I am just floored by this promo, its not your best. I wouldnt say that its even close, but it was engaging (maybe it dragged in parts) but it rocked!

Juan Lopez: Good choice in using therapy to really drive Juan and talk about how this feud has affected him and how he wants to become better and win this match really puts you in a connection with Juan and makes you want to root for him to take down OTE and Eyesnsane in particular.

Ashley O' Ryan: A good return promo, was sweet and cute and funny in a sense. Not as intense as I thought it would be that may be a good thing. I'm glad to have Ashley back and glad to see him returning to try and get the tag titles back, thats why we love Ashley he's a tag team genius.

Mustang Maddie: A cute little promo, nothing to call home about but I liked what you did here it seemed a natural flow for Maddie with this rp. Good job.

NOTE! Dr. Nash's computer has been acting up he contacted me from a library computer he's getting it fixed, he will post a promo later tonight just so Wolf does not win off a no show so just letting everyone know that Nash didn't just like no show he had a valid reason for missing the deadline.

[Dr Nash]

the lightscreen in the back of my labtop isn't working properly. taking it in to get fixed. it happened on thursday just as i finished off my promo. about to post it goes off. i would hate to for that promo go to waste. plus i'm sure wolf wouldn't want to win via no show. hopefully my labtopscreen light is working tomarrow properly or i will take to comp repair shop. windex got sprayed on screen. luckily not to much went in. i checked web askin through friends about it. found our rubbing a little rubbing alcohol helps with cotton swabs to the screen. hair dryer on a low setting to help dry. or get this labtop in a bag full of rice for a week or so. apparently rice works like an air filter would have to make sure no rice got into the labtop though. also i would crack open the screen but i don't trust myself as i want someone who knows what they are doing to do the operation. shouldn't be that bad. jabby can vouch there was a place where we live could be to use hundreds of comp at pc bang but the manager when crazy and shut the place down no notice what so ever. now we have the libary..only allowed an hour on comp. thanks kiddies for that. i am using a comp at friends house to type this out.

[Wolf]

I waited too long to win via no show

the irony of this is that my laptop went down, when I wanted to post my promo aswell, but I had most of it saved on email. I had to finish it in internet cafe. I hate those places, there are few things done other way I wanted

[Eyesnsane]

people thought you were a serious writer didn't they, they were like hey are you working on a novel? Why do they always call it a novel, it's just a damn book....same, same...

[Eyesnsane]

Thomas Princeton: A very cold sort of detached attack which I think is nice. I thought the flashback was entertaining as well, I'm gonna have to keep my eye on this guy a bit more...A very solid promo.


Sally: Aw, her was nervous, but so willing to go out there and show off that ass!! Yeah. but that was good stuff, I don't think we see nearly enough of her, I'm looking forward to more...Hers was a good promo

[DramaShark]

Thomas Princeton- Man and I thought your Supershow promo was good. Usually when people include flashback sequences it's usually to pad their promo with filler, but not this one. The transition was seamless and I enjoyed the promo very much. Loved how you ripped into Cameron and Alexx, and as amazing as Alexx's promo was I can safely say that this one was the winner. I really love how Princeton is getting to be more and more difficult to beat.

Eyensane (elimination chamber)- Here I thought Charon would be my biggest threat, You easily destroyed everyone with that promo. Almost everyone seriously though, I am glad to have joined the FWA while you were still new so I can watch the progression you have made. Hopefully as Eyensane moves into the TV title division either

[tmnt316]

I can add to the laptop pile, mine went kaput this past weekend too, hunk of friggin junk is all they are. But Stu kudos to you, you actually didn't just whine and look for an excuse, like some have done in the past, and went and found a way to post it.

Princeton: damn you are really bringing it with Princeton of late, back to top form I'd say. This is one of the best I've seen him rip into his opponents, in typical Princton fashion, in a while. You just came right at them through the whole promo, great job.

[Eyesnsane]

Chris Kennedy: Wow, I can tell Chris must pay some attention to Eyesnsane and Over the Edge, or at least the symatics of it all. This was an excellent promo, you really do good work with your character. You brought it, dropped it off, and made change before you left... lol good luck.

[Killswitch]

Very good promos by all of you. Some of the best I have read in a long time. The matches ought to be close and BIB seems like it will be one of the best shows ever in the history of the FWA. Keep them coming guys, the FWA is on the rise once again.