Carnal Contendership 2012 Promo Discussion Thread

[JD]

lol thanks ETE. I'm sure you'll fin a way

[HeisenShake]

r4r

[The Mac]

shake: idk man seemed u could do more...i didnt like this one as much as the last rondo promo i read...just seemed u were to generic with the lumping in of talent alh=though i loved the cheese line and who mac got lumped in with lol..scenery was cool it was similar to the classic rumble type promo just without the trashing of people maybe thats just rondos gimmick idk..the dream sequence was cool though

drew:loved the obscure leon lett reference.. u did a decent job of ripping a part the people that the team has problems with so that was crisp and to the point..i was wondering how u would handle having the team in there if ud rp separately or it would be a clusterfuck but everything flowed freely with just the right amount of sarcastic reply to some of the lesser talent and in depth info on the hatred between kennedy,over the edge,princeton and u guys..very good imo

swinny: Funny as hell dude very classic rumble format and was entertaining but it also ran out a bit got kinda boring but eventually fromage would have a good one liner and THERE CAN BE MAC WITHOUT THE CHEESE lol all in all long promo, very descriptive and the speech was funny but dragged

[Eyesnsane]

Sorry yall had some life going on, not really my best work this week,,,

[JD]

Stu St.Clair - The beginning of your promo where Stu is speaking in rhymes, that was magic. I liked how you addressed Comedy and Tragedy enough to where it kept your feud going without really interfering in your actual opponents, there was a great balance there. I chuckled at the line: "I am no pretty boy and I am certainly no Leonardo Dicaprio." I also liked how you reminded us that you have been absent from the last few Carnal Condenderships because you've always been champion, really brings home the point that Stu is very well one of the few people who belong in the unification match at BIB. Your assessment of your opponents were spot on, and I did like how you compared yourself to Duke Drazin, it was a good comparison.This was a very good promo from start to finish.

Keegan Hightower - I gotta say I am really liking this guy. His character is so intriguing, it's original he is. He looks like Ahmed Johnson but comes out to the Dropkick Murphys. The FWA needs a face like him. As far as the promo, it was damn solid. I like his take on things, he isn't cocky, he is humble, he is the opposite of APAB. Towards the end I had hoped his demeanor would have gotten a bit more aggressive, it seemed like it was headed that way. All in all a great promo, I hope this character makes some big moves in the FWA

Ayla El, completely caught me off guard! That was a damn good promo. I enjoyed it very much, my one gripe being that you could have spent a little more time talking about your opponents and a little less time talking about yourself. You did however rip Jennifer Sky a new one with just a couple sentences. lol. Great job

XXX- lol Xavier on Leno. A good idea, as Leno is a good NPC to play off of it seems. You really did a good job conveying the arrogance of XXX. He says he was born to be World Champion, I believe it. It was a tad short for a match of this caliber. I wish you would have said just a little bit more, but for the length it was it was a great read.

Jack Severino - Jack is back! This promo was easily one of my favorites. Probably one of the most engaging promos, the mind of Jack is a scary place. His take on each of his opponents was enjoyable to read, delivering each threat and/or insult with a frightening malevolence. His take on Servin was fun to read. The black font suits him perfectly.

Duke Drazin - Epic opening to a fantastic promo. Your paragraphs were chalk full of some of the best insults I've read in a while. Drazin, as always, balances humor and an almost nonchalant sense of aggression in a flawless union. "MC Fromage sounds like a bad shampoo, so Drazin will flush it down the drain. Maybe it will unclog the drain? But Drazin doubts it has enough fight in it for that." that had me laughing. Zombie Boudreau should be an unlockable character in the next FWA video game

Jennifer Sky - A spirited promo, although this one seems different than most, she seems like a heel in this one. I feel like it would have made more sense if she focused on how she was going to win and how important this is, as opposed to complaining about it. Complaining works if you are going the heel route though, and if so, good job then

Zaire Wyoming - I love this character so that being said I really wish this promo was longer

Mac (promo 1) - A little short but since your opponent didn't promo I think it's safe that this one is full of WIN

Mac (promo 2) - "I am gonna keep this short but definitely not sweet... " sums up this promo perfectly. You have really tapped into Macs aggression. Could have been longer but I still loved it.

MC Fomage (promo 1) - Yeah, okay

Ryan Rondo - Rondo once again showing us why he is the wildcard! This was a great promo Shake and the presentation was nice, light blue and white, it was appealing to the eye. You did a fantastic job ripping apart your opponents. Good luck!

APAB - Well, if this was a tag team match that would be one of the greatest APAB promos of all time, true story. I loved it. But since it's a singles match it seems a little awkward. I don't know. Damn good job tearing everyone apart, once again showing why APAB is a team to be reckoned with.

Veronique - You are too good lol. I am really digging this character. This promo was so good, I really hate you for it lol jk. The closing line was perfect. I laughed, but was not happy *grrrr* Fantastic job!

MC Fomage (promo 2) - your first promo...to this....I am shocked. This is such a good promo, your best one to date. Thats so awesome, you put a lot into this one. "And this, my friends, is called precognition, or a premonition, or seeing into the mafuckin' future, whatever you wanna call it." Had me in freaking stitches. Can not wait to see you flesh your character out a bit more because I see big things out of MC Fomage.

Eyensane - Solid promo. You probably could have said more but I like your approach with Eyensane, you have such a good handle on the character.

Killemall - Better than the Eyensane promo. It's strange, I always saw Eyensane as the leader of OTE but you seem to find more joy writing Killemall, at least thats what it shows in your promos. The scenery for this one was nice, I really enjoyed this promo.

[Embrace The Evermore]

I made JD "grrrr"

Ayla El: No offence to Kassie but Ayla is the real bitch of the FWA...you've done a good job of crafting a character that's all about herself, nothing else matters to her but Ayla.

[EeL]

Dinorah RedGrave: I liked the intro piece with the doctor's office and her predicting the future for the children, made me really think that there's something wrong with her in the head established that part of the character for me well. Loved the joke about not smoking pot since the TNA days (dunno if that was a joke but I found it funny). I kind of feel bad for her, it must be hard getting hit with news like that and it made me truly feel for her. Of course, all of that changed when I reached further into the rp where she decided to become the Valkyrie and made me hate her, I felt betrayed because I was getting to like her and feel sorry for her then have her up and change really affected me so the rp did it's job establishing her new gimmick. Loved the descriptions throughout, overall a very good rp.

[Wolfgang]

Jack Severino is trying to pull Wolf

1. promo of Mr. Cheese- Raped the grading system!!!
2. promo of Mr. Cheese- I agree with everything John-boy said. But you really shouldn't have runned the whole laundry list. It started great, but then it started to get annoying. However I applaud the great work with your limited FWA knowledge. You had nothing to work with and you still made gold out of it. You might end up in the EC match.

Ayla El- What a great promo it had everything! It was creative, entertaining, character developing. I disagree with John-Boy, since it was good that you didn't talked down everyone in the match. In CC promo you should be the main focus, screw the rest! These Royal Rumble matches always have some stories leading them underdog, boyhood dream etc. You created a great story for Ayla and that is to give FWA a big middle finger for misusing her. You are a candidate to win this thing in my eyes.

XXX- I agree with the Golden-boy. Great stuff I was reading it and I was like: "This guy trully believes that he will win, I blieve he will win" and that is point of CC promo + you hyped the match which is another thing you need in promo. I am sure that if FWA was real the XXX appearance would put more buts to the seats.

Stu- y u so good? What can I say that wasn't said about your promo thousand times in the past? .... pause.... nothing... you stole the show once again.

Killemall- I prefer this guy ove Eyesane and I thing that the promo was pretty good and still want a match

[Embrace The Evermore]

Wolfs just Severino jnr.

[Smartmark]

Internet problems made me no-show this week. I'm terribly sorry Mac

[Wolfgang]

^ This might be a little bit off topic, but... Do you realise that the second rope broke in that Jericho gif?

[Smartmark]

^^ yes I do

[The Mac]

feedback would be much appreciated guys

[Killswitch]

As I said I would review every promo so here we go:

Stu St. Clair: The first part of the promo was awesome. I think that it set off the mood of the promo. Loved the little note, thought that it hit on everything that you needed to say. What I have always liked about St. Clair is that he rips his opponents in such a subtle way yeah it works. Saying that all he wants is Wolf is awesome, it really shows that Stu doesn't care all he wants to do is take out his brother. I also loved the talk about the title leaving you not you losing the title, I thought that summed up the title in such a great way. Really, I'm trying to find a hole in this promo and I can't. It has to be there somewhere, but it is probably so small that I cannot find it.

Ayla El: First part of the promo was very good. Ayla is such a bitch, and it works. The part where she comes out I liked as well, all of the balloons seemed to fit so well. Also you took a bold move in this promo by not really talking about the opponents and that worked out pretty damn well. Just talking about yourself gave the promo a fresh feel. The only thing that I could find wrong with it that it seemed to drag on at the end. But still it was a solid promo.

XXX: Sometimes I like when some brings out a celebrity to promo with. Liked how you went with Jay Leno, something new and it got me interested right from the start. The promo was good and the Leno jokes were jokes I could see him making which brings a real life feel to the promo. Liked how you only hit on the people that you thought would give you lots of trouble. And as someone said in here they felt like this was a breakthrough promo and to be honest it really was. This is the BEST promo I have seen from you and you brought it at the right time.

???: (Although I know who it is ). All I have to say after reading the description of the promo is DAMN. To me (and I have been here for awhile now). You probably are one of the best ever in this aspect, it really makes you feel that you are there. It is just so amazing how you do it, and I wish that some day I can do it like that. The first part of the speech was damn good talking about the title and hitting on Stu, and everything showing that you are the real sadistic person, it was just amazing. The rest of the promo was damn good as well, going the same route as El, and not talking about opponents that match was bold but it worked very well here. One of the best promos I have read in a long time, you sir are a god. .

Duke Drazin: Really loved the concept of the promo. Of Duke being on an island by himself, really interesting and when I first saw that and read that it got me intrigued, and right off the bat I wanted to read more which was good. Talking about how Drazin doesn't really need to win this match because he has done everything is really good as well. Shows that he really doesn't need this match for his legacy, that if he does indeed win it only cements it more. You really nailed APAB which was good, good work from you as always.

Jennifer Sky: Loved how you play off Sky as being pissed off that she isn't getting the match that she wants. It really adds to her and makes you feel for her in a way. I feel the thing with Daniel should be something that you keep on doing as I think that could be pretty good if you flush it out more. The promo was alright, it just felt like it was missing something but still a decent promo and I can see you getting better and better.

Dinorah Redgrave: First off as usual from you I loved the scene. Liked how she took the picture and she looked at it, and the feelings she had while looking at it. The part with the doctor was really good in my eyes. Dinorah wanting to get back into the ring and the doctor kind of not wanting her to, seems really good and well life like, the pot part was pretty good as well. Just a nice way to end that part of the promo. There I thought you could have ended it and it would have been a solid promo. With saying that though, I think that having a second part of the promo wasn't bad. The start of the second part was *ahem* yeah really don't need to say anything else except that. The second part of the promo like the first could have stood by itself, this was the best Dinorah promo I have read, it was great and I love the new look of her, the new feel of her.

Zaire Wyoming: I know life has been busy for you, and I know how hard it is to promo with that. This was an alright promo, I just think that for a match like CC all the stops have to be pulled out. What you had was a great start and I have always liked Wyoming I just hope when life stops getting busy that we will see Wyoming where he should be.

Mac Michaud: Going to review both promos in one. Just easier. First promo was simple in my eyes, but you got to the point, sometimes in promos where your opponent doesn't promo I like to see more, because this is the chance to show the wrestler more, but still this was a good start and Mac is growing on me. Second promo time...Saying that you don't care about winning is bold but it shows the way you want Mac to be looked at, he wants to inflict pain and what better way to do that then in an Elimination Chamber match, good touch. The end of the promo with Todd Salum was good, like how you have a little thing going on with him, and talking about opponents and calling them victims was good as well. Good work.

MC Formage: Again going to review both promos in one. First promo is whatever as it was short. But it got the job done. Second promo...The start of the promo was damn good man. You just have a way to make me laugh in the promos which is good because it adds a lot to the promo and leaves you intrigued to what is going to happen. And what you are going to say next. The Precious comment made me laugh, some people might not get it but I did. Awesome. Nailed the opponents in a great way as well. The only problem I really had is that I felt the promo went on a little too long.

Ryan Rondo: The scene in this promo is pretty good showing all different groups of people and lumping it into the CC match. Good work from the start, again making me want to read more. Also saying that Rondo, doesn't fit in any of the groups as well was a nice touch, kind of giving him the lone wolf attitude. I loved the way you put everyone into their own group and talked about the group as a whole it was something different but it was a very solid idea.

Veronique: Good start of the promo saying that the FWA has changed, saying that they haven't seen someone like you before, again the scene makes you see Veronique in the clothes that she is wearing which adds a lot to the promo. That promo was *ahem* as well. Something that you have always done when promoing with Gabby and now here. Good promo, and I can see Veronique making an impact sometime soon.

Eyesensane and Killemall: Going to review both at the same time as it is easier. Both solid promos and like I have said before it is going to be hard to beat you win I have the titles on the line against you. They were short but like you said you had some things going on which sucks when that happens. But the promos, were good and I think that if you had more time you would have hit them out of the park. Good work as usual lately.

Tommy Tripper: One of my favorite wrestlers right now. Loved the concept of the promo you had. The start of it showing where you came from and such it was good. I think that right now you have gold, Tripper is someone new and he just has such a different feeling, I think that if you keep going you'll be a star in no time good work.

Alexx: You never miss anything and you always promo, this was a good promo but it just seemed generic to me in some parts. Like showing the opponents on the screen seems to me that it has been done before, but still you nailed the opponents pretty good when you talked about them so that was a plus. Also you need to be thanked for the hard work you have done in the FWA, you have been here since 2006 right? Or at least close and you always promo, you are someone that when we put you in a match we know you'll put something out, and I just wanted to say that, and I hope one day you get a run with the title you deserve it.

There all promos reviewed, and in depth in my eyes. Some great promos this week.

[Eyesnsane]

Thanks for the feedback

Johnny, I like them both, the same, did not think I showed a preference in my style, I'll be sure to mind that...

Wolf....Anytime, now, anytime, and be careful what you wish for my friend

Yeah KS, I am patiently waiting for that and I am going to bring it...